Set V, 11
Eliminating Wordiness Checklist
- Combine Sentences to eliminate needless repetition.
Repetitive: Bob went to the store. The store was
located on 8th Street.
Combined: Bob went to the store on 8th Street.
- Cut redundancy & repetition.
Redundancy: Juan enjoys his job as a mail
Concise: Juan enjoys working as a mail
- Cut long-winded phrases.
Long-winded phrase: At this point in time,...
Shorter version: Now,...
- Cut expletive constructions.
Expletive construction: There are many people who like
Without expletive: Many people like Tom.
- Reduce clauses to phrases.
Clause: Because Jane was feeling sleepy, she went to bed
Phrase: Feeling sleepy, Jane went to
- Replace passive verb forms of "to have" and "to
be" (is, was, were, are) with active verbs that show action.
Passive: She had the wheel in her hands.
Active: She gripped the wheel in her hands.
Cutting wordiness in these small ways adds up big when editing your work:
you will sound much more persuasive and intelligent in your writing.